Posts: 409
Name: Harry Burt
Location: Colchester, Essex, England
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I'd improve your English a lot, because otherwise, it becomes not engaging enough . A few few atrocities (OK, maybe a little harsh....  ):
Quote:
the us army
diffrent
Me Ali and Korey
through out
unbeleaveable
at it's finest
wont
Ive
cant
feel your being
reconition
don't not even recognize there kids (?)
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Obvious some are colloquialisms, but it's still annoying.
Interesting viewpoint; but I can't help feeling the mix of home (i.e. about family, the Army) and web (i.e. reviews) is not ideal.
Last edited by Foundationflash : 06-29-2008 at 08:45 AM.
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