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Location: Palo Alto, California
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Freyja, you should be satisfied. This second effort of yours is extremely good, and is now in the lead. It's striving, touching, and definitely Caduceus. It does still look a little too playful for our tastes. Plus, we may wind up reducing it down in size to as small as 100 or 50 pixels tall, which would make an outline-only logo hard to see. So would you please consider filling the outline in entirely with the blue color? And, raising the bottom edge of the wings so that they're completely clear of the snakes? Some of the definition will be lost, yes. But the added clarity will be just what we're looking for.
Katesrobyn, your first effort remains your best. This most recent effort -- your third -- looks a little too much like caduceus is reaching out to embrace, not touch. We like your style, and would suggest that if you choose to try again, you use your first effort as a starting point. Thank you Katesrobyn!
JayGun, you -- very reasonably! -- are asking us to say exactly what we do and don't like about your piece. This is hard, because it's not a matter of specific things that don't work, it's that the whole feeling of "striving gracefully to touch" isn't there. But I'm grateful for your effort, and you asked, so I will try. First, the concentric circle head doesn't convey grace or health. Second, the single snake has quite a standout head, which makes it look more like a devil tail. Also, Caduceus seems to be looking away from the thing he's reaching out to touch, instead of towards it. Fourth, he looks like he's going to fall over. And finally, one wing looks larger than the other, as opposed to just being in the foreground. JayGun, I'm certainly in no position to criticize your work, so please don't take this the wrong way! But you asked, so there you go.
Thank you all very much!
Last edited by Judicial; 10-08-2009 at 12:39 PM..
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Personally I'm satisfied. 
